Overall this article is fairly well written with a clear target audience and a suitable journalistic style. Some comments and points could use a little work stylistically, also there is a paragraph about Lily Allen repeated at the end and I am not sure your concluding comment is appropriate. In terms of layout you have followed many magazine conventions well such as the title, columns and page numbering. The top two images still look a little stretched but this is a good first article Kyra. Amy
Overall this article is fairly well written with a clear target audience and a suitable journalistic style. Some comments and points could use a little work stylistically, also there is a paragraph about Lily Allen repeated at the end and I am not sure your concluding comment is appropriate. In terms of layout you have followed many magazine conventions well such as the title, columns and page numbering. The top two images still look a little stretched but this is a good first article Kyra.
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